the sun in your smile
you
always
amaze me
with the power
of your sweetest smile
on those days of sadness
when my tears blur my vision
i only have to wipe my eyes
and see you standing there before me
the sun in your smile makes it all better
and i laugh as i see your face alit
the golden new day frames it so well
and your teeth a breezy snowscape
a thrilling magic sleigh ride
on powdery new snow
flakes of love pure
our hearts beat
as we
kiss.
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Must be smileday instead of sunday! Good etheree Mark. I like the counting poems now if I could actually figure out rhymes I'd have it made. raskin
you're extremely talented, raskin...
and I'm sure you could master rhymes in no time.
I think I counted out all the syllables right in this one. I've never done one before. I'm sure someone will let me know if I didn't.
Thanks for the wonderful comment!
Take care,
Mark
response
Thanks for the nice compliment. I enjoy writing and if someone likes it thats very nice. I liked this poem mainly because I value smiling and not the polite social smile but the I feel really good smile. I've had some significant loss in my life and I could have gone one of two ways. When I feel good I show it and I don't care what anyone thinks. It's wonderful to feel good, I don't second guess it just take it as it is. This just struck a nerve with me. You really never know how a smile affects the person your smiling at, it's those little things I guess. One more thing the shape of the poem intentional? raskin
what? oh...
you mean that it's kinda shaped like a sideways smile? No...I haven't really noticed it till you said that...kinda cool. I'd like to take credit for it and say it was intentional but...nah...i'm not that bright.
That is a very cool observation, though! Thanks!
Take care,
Mark
More like a
bugs bunny grin. raskin
yeah
it is a bit buck-toothed, isn't it?
Now I see the grin!
aww, it's so cute, such a soft and relaxing etheree(s) Mark, a 10/10 for a first timer! :D ♥