Periwinkle Boy
I am no better-
Than an impatient
Petal of a hillside periwinkle
Hurrying to break away
From its stems
And roots
Just
To falter
And mingle freely
With mountain dusts.
Till it lays
Motionlessly
Over Earth’s open mouth.
I am impermanent.
Just another momentary failure
In your life.
Ever-deceitful.
I am sorry,
For being a 'boy'
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something about this i love
I really love this eric. It's like an open heart spilling out a million little hearts all over the place.
it's sad, but then i feel happy for it.
I know im going to be rereading this one all night..i love how some poems keep me on my toes trying to think of exactly what people mean in them.
This is a keeper eric. nice going
xo
Linda
Then,
I better not explain further. hehe...
Thanks for reading and commenting Linda!
One thing is for certain,
this is about me saying sorry for being me...
Thanks! Thanks!
Eric
~Momentary Failure~
Eric,
You are very sensitive. This poem opens with such imagery and then fizzles into the mindset of a 'boy'.
If you are the same 'boy' that compared himself to a hillside periwinkle, you are very romantic. Be true to yourself, and your status will change.
You have an excellent sense of heartache and how long a moment is. A moment is long enough to become permanent.
Warm regards,
Kathy
Blame it...
on this quarterlife crisis I'm having...
I turned 25 last October...
and it seemed everything changed since then...
Should I reroute everything in my life?
Am I now a man? A boy?
How will I measure my success?
I really don't have a clue until now...
And this fickle mindedness has caused
me hurting other people...
And, the intended of this poem...
was the 1st person who was hurt due to the changes of this so-called 'crisis' I am having.
I am trying to fix everything Kathy.
And, it helps that I get to express myself through poetry...
And, I get not only tips/comments about writing...
but moreso, insight about 'Life'...
From more learned people like you...
I appreciate the comment Kathy.
I really do.
Eric
Lost in reading
WOW, I love it when a work just catches you,
and doesn't let loose its grip on your mind.
This is one of those works, that no matter how quick the read,
it constantly begs you to dwell...
After reading I laid in bed, almost fell asleep, then came back to read again,
feeling somewhat more satisfied by delving deeper into my own sense of lost time.
Great work,
Michael S. Horger
Ironic...
I also went to sleep almost, with just this thought in my head:
Does this piece completely describe my intentions?
And reading your comment now, assured me, that it is perfect just the way it is. Thanks for that!
Thanks also for spending time reading, moreso, commenting on it.
You made my day, buddy!
Eric