Decisions, Desicions
decisions, decisions.
I find I don't need to
make that incision,
and that this position
had not been envisioned
decisions, decisions.
why do i need to
make that division?
if not, would it cause
such a horrible collision?
decisions, decisions.
can I even decide
in my current condition?
I do have ambition,
but i am no magician.
decisions, decisions.
I used to use the
natural intuition.
but now I'd need
some mathematicians.
decisions, decisions.
you'd think i could
use recognition,
to understand the
same position.
But alas, now i see,
my before "decision"
was never to have any
kind of infliction.
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unassociated
I will be perfectly honest with you in my assessment of this piece. To me it seemed like an exercise in seeing if you could come up with some rhyming words without worrying whether the story they were in made any sense. I am a true believer in rhyme but I am also a true believer that the story comes first and the rhyme scheme is complimentary not the main thrust.
Pete
i kind of agree...
i wrote it awhile ago, it isn't my best work. And i did use a rhyme dictionary, i let the poem shape the story instead of using it to add to the story. I had an idea, but it kind of got lost in with what I was doing.
i just figured i hadn't posted in awhile, might as well see if anyone loved it or something.
thank you for telling me like it is.
You're welcome
You will find that I am honest with my comments otherwise why bother commenting at all.
Pete