Swamplands and all
Not adulations nor salutations
would thwart me transfixed, it seemed obsession
to remain in my grey abyss
without horizons nor the suns promise
The perfect pretext of grandesque
Ruminating over every detail,
tirelessly scrutinizing issues
religiously in my self imposed jail
for a soul contused and a love misused
a maggot-infested, hollow tree shattered
Punished, tested under the weight of blunder
sunken, damp, and feeble in the swampy somber
Muddled and encroached by countless failures
Haunted by the memory of fresh green,
the scent of a sweet-smelling fresh breeze,
and the flash of gold amidst dark leaves;
The ghost of an echo permeates softly.
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murkiness
An emotional murkiness to this one. Life in a swamp I can almost feel the stillness of the air, decay. "Ruminating over every detail" a self imposed jail. Living in this dark place by choice? Haunted by other memories. Very good imagery and metaphor. Very emotional. raskin
A new year
It was a reflective piece,
i just looked back, on the year that had past
and conjured up all the feelings of hopeless
into the culmination that is this poem
Thank, and yes it was a choice
for me to stay chained to these lofty
negative thoughts, thank you for you comment :)
Truly impressive concrete imagery...
Great descriptive elements here. I really pick up on the "dire theatrical effect" in which you have successfully come to convey. This seems, indeed, a very well-structured body of material, blending the aspects of profound subject matter with truly impressive concrete imagery. A really inventive, and quality write!!
J.P.
(Rex)
Swamps
It has a very dire feeling,
mostly due to the listlessness endured at the time, then when the year seemed a swamp. im glad i conveyed the effect i was hoping for, that was the general airs of the last year; though, i know that it was completely by choice, to endure unnecessary anguish.
although, im glad you enjoyed this write, thank you for you thoughtfulness ^__