An Elliptic Allusion
Shutting the door, I sigh, undress, and peer into the mirror, nude.
Silence, deafening silence. I peer into those eyes, thoughtlessly
Dissatisfied or pleased, I glide across the floor.
There are no windows. The world is... Just plain.
The water begins to run and my skin cries
As cold water stings my senses,
Stepping into the gray abyss.
There is no impending pressure passing the threshold;
My conscious goes numb and I am finally truly alone.
Morality, etiquette, civilization-
These things die away with the steam
Rising up from the ground wafting and filling my nostrils.
My heart beats, My heart stirs, and speaks the essence of my soul.
Am I misguided?
I... Don't care. I am free. I am... Apathetic.
I... I can taste the damp air.
I... feel the steamy water;
Running over my shoulders,
Licking my neck,
Messaging my back,
Caressing my chest,
Running along my legs
Soothing my feet
Through to the floor of this sacred place.
Here I am unforgiven, but not condemned,
Neither involved nor exempt. There is no tomorrow,
There is no past, I am suspended in time.
Suspended. Out of service. Decomissioned. Released
As I stare into the blurred image of a fogged mirror.
The plain reminder that all I am is here with me,
Within this sacred place, here, where I am alone and free,
Where nothing else matters.
No territories, no obligations, no poltics;
Only the beat of a heart feeling the knife of time
Pressing me onward, refusing to leave me still.
Robbing me of my peace like a thief
Always calling me to make a choice...
That imminent question that incessantly beckons;
Eternal damnation or everlasting salvation?
But not here, not now.
I.. I'm safe here,
Flushing the world away
To be dealt with another day,
Sitting still to savor this moment,
To bask in this ominous place.
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intimate setting
This is a really interesting poem. Writing about something we all do, only you made it thought provoking. Reading this I feel as though I'm peering through the fogged up mirror. Great writing.
raskin
Raskin :)
Thank you I really appreciate your response, and reaction.
I feel as though you should know that in a quiet way,
It was one of your poems that has me making poems
That aim to create a particular atmosphere and feeling :)
I kept it, saved it away to be looked over from time to time,
Because to me that poem was true on many levels within
Many dimensions, and so I hope that my poems, poems
Such as these, might one reach that caliber, and
Cultivate that ability to reach someone as yours reached me.
The peom I speak of is "My Leviathan",
And the impression of that emotion you created therein has never left me.
Thanks again Raskin, thanks for everything.
Atmosphere
Yeah that's it. I've gone back and re read your poems. Remind me of some of the old black and white films filled with atmosphere. Emotional but not in the conventional way. I find them interesting to read, some I can relate to like this one.
raskin