you are hunted

you are hunted as much as me
you are blind but you can see
the pain the past that in it you will be
you left it behind but trembling your knee
down on them in the church praying to be free

leave your self in the light
forget about the last fight
look at the stars and sleep tonight
don't you ask for help you are haunted you are
you still the victim of a little drink on a bar

i know you have been always thinking of it
dieing leaving it all behind forgetting about this shit
but listen their are other ways to live dieing doesn't worth it
be patience love your self i promise you you will get throe it

you left off the 't' on the

you left off the 't' on the end of the 3rd line, vs 2. but fantastic writing, only wish it was longer ;)

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The first five lines of stanza one

You have defined life in these lines.
The best part is that these lines expand in the readers mind to stretch him into the truth he is looking for.
Great write, compliments.

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pls read and comment my poem more
loved the way that you both loved my poem he he
i loved your too
thanks nature 36 for the compliments you r poems are so meaningful to me
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