imitating dusk
she lie in a bed
surrounded by those she love
we sat on a bench
chandelier shone like rain drops
light dimmed imitating dusk
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I like nonesense, it wakes up the brain cells. Fantasy is a necessary ingredient in living, it's a way of looking at life through the wrong end of a telescope. Which is what I do, and that enables you to laugh at life's realities. Dr. Seuss(1904-1991)
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nice...
this was well put together, I pictured the scene to perfection.
great imagery
Ronald J. Edwards
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http://trinityinkexperiencestrengthandhope.blogspot.com
the "rain drops " of tears
the "dimmed light" for the ending of the time when it once shown brightly
as the"loved one" passes into the dusk.
Well chosen words for a time when the cycle of life finish's.
thank you raskin
ron
Thank you to both for reading
and leaving such nice comments. I was really trying to utilise the tanka to see if I could convey the emotion of my mothers death, reflecting the love and loss. Ron great comment, good feedback. raskin