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big snowflakes

Posted October 4th, 2008 by raskin

how can I not see
boldly you look in my eyes
confusion reigns in my heart
wistful as fall turns to winter
big snowflakes fall where you stood

I love this

On October 6th, 2008 JewelPhoenix says:

Being longer than a haiku, tankas allow you to capture more than a second or two, and you've done just that, I really love it ♥

you are

On October 6th, 2008 raskin says:

precious, thanks so much for the nice comment. I was trying to encapsulate a moment and see if I could bring in the wistfulness of that moment. I've been playing around with these tankas, I enjoy them. raskin

Maybe I am!

On October 6th, 2008 JewelPhoenix says:

That's OK, I enjoy writing tankas/haikus too, they're tricky getting the amount of syllables right, but once you've got the knack they're wonderful to write ♥

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