Lonesome Angel
I scratch my way across the bathroom floor
Anything to get to the light
Skin crawling
Heart racing
Can't
Breathe.
The bottle of pills lays on the floor,
Empty.
The lights blur and swim behind my eyes
I'm sinking.
I don't know how many I must have taken
But now I'm going numb.
The pain is finally disappearing
And taking my soul with it.
I have lost all passion
I've escaped from sense of mind
My body is convulsing
Death whispers its time.
The darkness is taking over
And then my final breath past through my lips
I feel the brush of your fingertips
Soft against my blue-ish lips
If you had been here
I might have thought twice
I see the fear behind your eyes
Feel your hand holding mine
As you beg for me to stay
And I can see you cry
My eyes roll back into my head
And then I'm dead.
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that is great except the whole dying part
From Darkness to Darkness
ratnaprabha r raykar its a
ratnaprabha r raykar
its a very good write but death is not so dramatic always
Until I... Until I could no lon...
I liked this a lot but I would have liked it if you left out the last line, "And then I'm dead", Maybe just describe a little more of the fact that you are aware of what is going on around you but are not able to show any signs that you are aware... And then in the middle of a line just be done with it without finishing your thought... Everyone would know what happened
My eyes roll back into my head
I could no longer see
I could not feel your tears dripping on my naked body
Your moans were fading slowly
Until I... Until I could no lon.
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I wrote a poem called "Before Time is Done" at the end of it I am writing the word "Done" and I don't finish writing it. I could not post it as it is my book. This website would not format the scribble and the ink blot that represent my death before I finished the poem. It has a great affect on people though when they read it in my book and see the ink blot... Every once in a while I get somebody that thinks that they got a bad copy and they don't get it... makes me laugh! Anyway... I did not mean to turn this in to "All About Me"!
Nice write and Great concept!
Where are you going to school and what are your plans when you graduate?
Ray AKA Yobarney
I'm afraid I must admit, I
I'm afraid I must admit, I wrote this on the fly. I just started typing and this is what the end results were. It could be much better.
I wish I had thought of that beforehand. The ending was not coming to be so I made it rather abrupt. That would have been much better :p lol.
I appreciate all the feedback.
I'm currently attending Indiana University as a journalism major and history minor. After graduation, I plan on going into radio or television broadcasting. If that falls through, there's always PR. ....
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