It is from that school of poetry, but far from a Bukowski. You absolutely missed the point I was making on the drawings. Subtlety kills, outright shock is boring and insulting. It's like these " shock artists " are telling their audience..." you are stupid, here this is shocking " ( see for example: Madonna, Howard Stern, etc. ). Bukowski for having a natural talent at writing wasted it on hard drinking and hard living, not saying everyone should write flowery happy poems, there has to be ugliness displayed and proudly chronicled but not all the time. Most of the Bukowski I have read he leads the reader down the path and then lets them know they are at a dead end. Freestyle, to me is like Symbolism way too many have used it as an umbrella for other works that are similar in nature and thereby defeating the purpose of having that school/and or movement. I get the point you were trying to make in the write itself, just wonder what would happen if you went subtle ? If you are familiar with Public Image Limited ( John Lydon aka: Johnny Rotten lead singer of the Sex Pistols group ) they have a lot of angry nasty songs that creep up on the listener and then slap them in the face, as compared to say Slipknot where we know they are going nasty the second you hear them.