life

She sat under a peach tree in the dark
listening to the sound of the stream flowing by.
A flicker here, a flicker there of hamlets strewn across the dark hills she could see...
it was so peaceful and cool...
just the faint sound of crickets making their evening call...
"life is idyllic ",she thought to herself.

beautiful

thoughtful, calm. Nice scene setting. raskin

Raskin

oh this evening i was a little upset and so went to sit in the garden ,as i was sitting i suddenly realized everything around me was so beautiful that i forgot what had brought me there in the first place.Thank you for the comment..just wanted to share the beauty.

What a lovely poem, Mimi

Your words were so peaceful...the setting so serene...thank you for the peaceful journey, so beautifully written.
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tj

Thank you very much..for your beautiful comment..

Beautiful scene!

Thanks for sharing a peek at a very lovely, calming scene! Enjoyed, Sharon

Sharon Miller Bolander

Thank you

Sharon..nice of you to read and comment,Thankyou,hope to read more of your work too.

N1CE MIMI

You set the scene beautifully here ^_^... I almost found myself up on those hills peering out~~B.E.Coast

Bryce

Hey thats such a nice comment to make.Thanks.

Life

Yes; well said. You have one looooong line. Is that a formatting accident, or the way you wrote it? Seems too long to me. But the message, a wonderful sense of awareness and appreciation. As Mary Oliver has said, "learn to love the world."

George

jorge...

thanks for the comment,just wrote it straight off and didn't think too much of formatting,but i have tried to just make a slight change,does it read ok now...thanks again

I like the line about the flickering hamlets...

they suggest the twinkling lights of houses seen from afar with the accompanying music of crickets chirping. Very nice, mimi.

joyce

joyce

Its always a pleasure to read your comment.Thank you very much

Life

Yep. perfect

George

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