Into the land where the river flows

Let me walk in step with thee
thru trails,and paths,and valleys low.
Across the boulders,mountains high...
into the land where the river flows.

All journeys seem less then a mile
when in you i rest a while.

I remember...

When travel weary and full of strife,
I first drank the cup of life.
I couldn't then first tell
how and when I had cast off the shell,
my feet suddenly was unfettered free
dancing to a different beat,
from a tainted past so sore
which I couldn't ignore before,
but when i gulped the drink of life
I felt a searing as tho a knife....
i knew something had broken free,
i just didn't know it was me!

mimi

This sounds very much like an awakening and that is for sure a good thing. I enjyed the progression of this piece.

Pete

PS: Let me know if you noticed any errors in this piece.

pete,thank you for the read

pete,thank you for the read and the comment,does it look better now...just did the 'I's and punctuation..if i have mised out any... I would be glad to hear.

very well done, mimi...

I particularly liked the last stanza and your discovery of yourself! Lovely.

joyce

Thank you Joyce for your

Thank you Joyce for your kind comment

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