Another poem to chill your bones (type me a title)

While writing down these words,my red fingers are shaking.
I cannot see anything anymore or I just don't want to.
Raised my wrath upon them,this is not my making.
Another carnival of corpses I ran into.

1,2,3,4...
horned watcher at the door.

5,6,7,8...
someone waits at the gate.

I see the bodies layed on the floor.
And I gaze at me dressed in red.
I swear I saw the same stains before
and heard footsteps when I went to bed.

Blood,blood,blood
I killed the fat goose
mud, mud, mud
on my mary-jane shoes.

I try to find it.
I know it must be there.
Maybe someoe took it
who would dare?

A cleaver covered in rose
My mother is down sleeping
another tragic loss
but I'm not weeping.

8,7,6,5...
nobody could survive.

4,3,2,1...
As said the horned man.

My father has his skin away
his skull is now bare.
They are here to stay.
My grandma dyed scarlet her white hair.

Chop,chop,chop...
there goes their last hope
kill,kill,kill...
without my will.

My mind was so numb as I was licking the blade.
So many deep voices in my head.
If I were sober, I would totally fade.
but now I couldn't be more scared.

1,2,3,4
bathtub stained with dirt and gore.

5,6,7,8...
false try to escape my fait.

I buried them all under the floor tires.
six feet under,which is quite deep I think.
I don't really care about these liars.
Decay makes flesh shrink.

run,run,run...
to the gate.
horned man
will await.

1,2,3,4...
there are people in the floor.

5,6 and lucky 7
there's no place for me in heaven.

8...
branded by my very hate
horned man is at the gate.

9...
he says all went exactly fine.

10...
and nobody will see me again.

10,9,8,7,6,4,3,2,1
he says to put in my mouth a gun.

fire he says...shoot he says
and I could not possibly disobey.
It couldn't hurt less.
Now I am on my way.

wonderful writing

You writing is wonderful. i really like it

WOW!A comment!

Thank you very very much!You're the first person commenting on this piece!Let me kiss you! *smooch*
if you have atitle for it plz tell me ^_^

#Your faithful murderous lolita#

if

I will read this poem again and will hopefully help you find a title to your poem. your poems are absoulutly AMAZING!! i like the way you put your words together if only i knew how to do that i am a learning writter...

^_^

thank you very much and don't worry,all the game in rhymes is to match the right words...try listening to emilie autumn or I am ghost,they are very poetic and awesome artists and their songs will surely inspire you! :)

#Your faithful murderous lolita#

thanks

thank you for the help and i will surely listen to them as for your poem i am still trying to find a title for your poem. May I ask you a question? if you dont mind?

Of course!

feel free to ask ^_^

#Your faithful murderous lolita#

would?

would you ever consider reading some of my poems and possibly tell me what you think and what i could do to make them better?

Sure!:)

I really want to read some of your work and I would do it anyway

#Your faithful murderous lolita#

thank you

thank you for reading them, and it all comes from the heart.
And i will answer your question of why im hurt or unhappy most of it is because i have no one in my life my parents dont care about me and just treat me like im not there. Also school to i am a failure in school as well but thank you so much for reading my poems it makes me feel good that i know that someone likes them THANK YOU

don't worry...

My parents were awful,my mother used to blame me for everything,telling me I'd be her death.You see, she smoked like a chimney and when she was gone I was left with the guilt.My dad wanted a boy and thought I was demented and a hopeless daydreamer.In school it was hell,I was a stundent in the american college of greece,a strict awful place with lots of spoiled brats and nerds,who wouldn't miss a chance to mock me if I failed on a test,which resulted to my so called "Cutting sessions" and my dedication to manga and comics.
My life was way better after school...clubbing,drawing and stuff,
I could have maintained it if I hadn't done so many stupid mistakes.
But still I'm happy,I work on stuff I adore,I have a little girl I love
and I still-thank god-have my mind.
Believe me,I used to think about suicide a lot and had tried to commit several times (with really awkward and somewhat hilarious ways) but I realised that nobody would care and that if I must commit suicide I must not seek sympathy but release from senses.
Negative feelings are temporary and the best way to get rid of 'em is to use them in art.Don't u agree?

#Your faithful murderous lolita#

hmm..

I do have to agree with you well i actually have been in the hospital for my stupid mistakes i took way to many pills, and for my 7 inch laceration on my wrist but had to have 7 staples for it to but i kinda know where your coming from i have alot of problems to many to name sorry for bragging but for some reason i like to talk to you because you have been there. one question Do you know were Idaho is?
manda16

Idaho?

Somewhere in America abviously...I don't exactly know where:(
You see I live in greece >_

ya

yes it is in america and i wish i could go where you live in greece. And i say that you may write a song or do what you were going to do. thank you for reading it

^_^ always my pleasure

I'll strart thinking of that song...:)

#Your faithful murderous lolita#

ok

Okay thank you i guess i should say:) I guess im kinda slow at writing poems it takes a while for them to come to my mind also it depends on the day as well when you have the song just let me know.

Poem's done and I hope you like it^_^

want me to post it as a comment or submit it directly?:D

#Your faithful murderous lolita#

?

what ever you would like and would be the easiest.

I'll post it as a comment here...

so you can view it first :)hope you like it.

They pretend they don’t notice her.
Well, that’s a pity…yes it is.
Ignorant as they are can’t see her virtues

Or the majestic methods she uses her suffering to seize.

An artist of words and an artist of flesh
A combination demonically divine
Relieve the pressure, relieve the stress

Drops of red and she is just fine.

Teachers will never understand
That marks don’t count in real life.
She holds some soul inside her hand.

And won’t share it with you if you paint her with distress and strife.

A meticulous cutter, a harvester of pain
Scars on her wrists as badges of pride
Princess of razors,they ought to tremble at thy name…

Veins displayed, blood to wash away the guilt inside.

She did it once and she does it again
Things they can’t even think with their little tiny minds
So poet,pick up your shattered thoughts,grab your black pen

And with your words darken this world and scrap it all behind.

Keep your anger and your sorrow,rise them up to the sky
Waterfalls full of roses to purify the false belief.
They hurt you, even if you really try

Pain is never mistaking,Pain is truth,pain brings relief

But don’t favor them by dying
‘cause even death can’t melt a selfish cold heart.
So stand up and stop crying
Pick up your pieces and go back to the start.

Fools and idiots are blind and deaf, disgustingly immoral in any way
So don’t bother and don’t grieve my dear friend, everything’s set…
This is your stage, your role and your play

Only you haven’t realized it yet.

sorry about the form

#Your faithful murderous lolita#

wow

well i really like it and that is for me? is it about me? if it is wow i love it it seems so true thank you very much for that

of course it is !You're a very inspiring person

so,may I upload oit along with a dedication?

#Your faithful murderous lolita#

yes

yes you may! thank you so much you made my day

Thank you

thank you very much. I wish that i could write about someone else but that dont seem to work for me very well. I tryed it and well i didnt get very nice comments from people so i deleted it. ok i am going to ask you something dont you hate it when you get bad comments on poems that took you so long to write and when the people dont even know you start saying bad things about you?

Hey don't worry about bad comments :)

When people are ignorant they say stuff without even thinking they might hurt someone^_^
I had a hard time with bad comments on my so called suicide poem

in fact smn wrote me :"you'll find sympathy between shit and syphilis" and then posted a poem about that!
I was pissed to the core.So I wrote a revenge poem and started a lyrical battle,of course in the end we apologized to each other and he's still in my buddylist :)and I still like him.
Bad comments about my poems always pissed me off,but when it gets personal....boy,I make things really ugly.
Don't let bad comments harm you!You can tell them off or you can write a poem about their comment and kick their lil' butt.

You really shouldn't delete that poem!I'd love to read it!

#Your faithful murderous lolita#

it was a while back

when i deleted it. i just felt that no one really cares enough to understand that that is how i feel about that person but i give up on writing about other people when it shows no affection to them i have paragraphs that are nothing but feeling inside and i dont put them on here because it is not a poem. people tell me that if it is not a poem then dont put it on this site so i dont and it irritates me because they dont know me nor my feelings. i have one that i would be willing to put on here for you to read but i dont know yet i want to but i just dont want to feel hopeless inside

^_^ A poem is a poem whatever its form is

People who say that it's not a poem simply don't understand the meaning of true poetry which is emotional expression of course^_^
So whoever tells you that,cannot consider himself or herself a poet.
I think you should post here whatever you like and in any form!And if they post you bad comments tell them off or delete their comments not your poem!
I'd love to read your poem!Plz submit it :D I'll be waiting!

and don't worry!a friend of mine says:"if the idiots hurt you,it proves you're not one of them."

#Your faithful murderous lolita#

ok..

i did post one called thinking but i dont know it just doesnt sound right to me and i will get more put on here for you to read thank you

i think

i think it was bad but im not sure. but oh well thanks for reading it

It wasn't bad at all!It was wonderful!

^_^

#Your faithful murderous lolita#

sorry

sorry i havent been putting them on here i just have a lot going on im my life bad bad days are ahead of me sorry

sorry

im just not doing well and thinking about that one thing that somes to my mind

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