Inspired by our begining (repost from 12/25/08)

(This one was inspired by you pam,looking for a better way, for words to lay,for bringing words to life,and color from black and white, Kristi, this is what I had in mind when I joined this site,before it all went astray, I hope we both have better days-Lee)

Your beauty you never see,
like a summer day,
I wish would never go away,
you blew through me like a summer wind,
carried by the current
of a summer storm,
and before I could run,
I seen a rainbow in your eyes,
and disapear did all the dark clouds,
like from command, of your smile.
and laying in a green valley,
flowers full of life,
with rays of your presense
suppling light,
lies a broken heart,
with no regrets,
for the smile
you once gave to me,
was worth all this...
and for one more smile
its what I most miss.

OK... I amended the end alittle...

Is this what happens when someone trys to repost a poem? or is it the fact I am really not a very good writer? I original wrote this in about 2 minutes, but It took me about an hour and a half to fix it,or atleast try,lol .... but I made someone a promise to repost this....

Thank you

That was beautiful and you are not a bad writer

I like!

This is definitely heartfelt and not bad at all, Lee.

Thanks....

Thanks for your comments Neo, somebody ask me (of all people) to show them how to write better poetry, this started how more as an example, then became about something close to my heart. Thanks-Lee

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