Sonnet for the Manic-Depressive Mind
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A troubled mind is a terrible thing to waste
An imperfect brain that thinks at its own pace
A frightening and exciting unconscious with haste
That reels through a constant and precious race
Then the dreary melancholy takes over
Drowning my days with sorrow that hovers
Underneath, there's a brilliance shining moreover
My mind filled with thoughts like that of life-lovers
Now I must learn to harness the power
Use my potential once hindered by tumult
Refusing to let my brain make my soul cower
Ready to press on with hope's catapult
Loving life with a passion that burns me
Fire inside the ashes of lethargy
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everyday battle
It's an everyday battle, and I know it well. You put it into words perfectly.
thank you
ty for commenting... I'm new on here and was afraid no one would comment. thanks.
the elements of a sonnet?
this poem got torn to shreds by by another site, more critical... what are your thoughts on meter and the elements of a sonnet here? Shakespeare varied the sonnet by changing the rhyme scheme... in this modern world of accepted free-verse, is it allright to deviate from iambic pentameter, or is it disrespectful to the art? Classical music and big band gave way to rock and roll; have you ever heard a man speak with his guitar? is it possible to write that down on a treble clef and have a marching band replicate it at a football game?
thoughts self-absorbed, I apologize...
(and I certainly don't claim to be as gifted as Shakespeare, but he was probably just a regular guy [or gal] to those who knew him)
hi
I don't really get into most tradional poetry, though I enjoy and respect some, it's not for me. I care more about the feeling a poem gives me and the statement it makes rather than the structure, meter, etc.
It's not disrespectful, in my opinion, to change anything up, but there are many tradionalists who'd disagree; that's probably why people on that site tore this up. You should just write what you feel and not worry about what other people think.
ditto to what neo said...
That's what I like about this site. People concentrate more on the feelings that a poem can generate and the expression rather than the construction. And you express yourself very well here!
Take care,
Mark
ty
thanks, guys...
didn't mean to throw tumbling tumbleweeds at you... haven't been on here in a week or more. I appreciate your comments:)
your average everyday word-arranger,
Ladybug Laureate