A Sea of Tears

I cry
a sea of tears
I want to die,
as my droplets
turn to blood
as I watch
them form a flood,
as I sink,
as I swim,
as I struggle to stay afloat
as I don't win,
as I swallow
as I get dragged down
as fate allows it to be
my death without a sound.

Felt it

I love this poem. I know these feelings and I love the way you wrote them and, I don't know if this was intentional or not, but the repetition of "as I..." evoked the sense of the repeated bobbing when one is floating in the sea. Great writing. --Toti

Thank you

It means a lot to know that somone actually "loves" one of my writes! It was sort of intentional, I wrote it then looked back on it and liked the way it sounded, so I'm glad it adds something to the poem ♥

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