Dinali

I think this poem goes to show how that "close to death experiance" gives us the urge of wanting to confess all that we have, and to try hard to be closer to the ones we love! All through the poem I was wondering... "is the poet a soldier?".

I think the poem is good, but you can try to work a little bit on your stops and ends. Other then that, good job.

It's truly touching. I can understand how that feels since both of my parents are gone. It is a feeling you've captured perfectly-- a sense of uncertainty.

Beautifully sorrowful.
Deborah

I like how it's written almost as a note on the fridge explaining that you went over to a friend's house. It's short simple and to the point, but it goes on to be a lot more powerful than that. It's always hard to imagine how the parents must feel when they have a child fighting across seas. Somehow, it doesn't make sense that soldiers would still be that sentimental toward good old mom and dad, but they are and this poem is sort of an eye opener. Sometimes I forget that there is more than one kind of love in the world.

With all sincerity,
--The Bleeding Bridesmaid

This reminds me of when I heard my uncle was in Iraq.and he would send my aunt and two twin cousins emails.this is beautiful baby.i love you so much.keep it up baby! :)

baby,you are a neverending dream that came true
iloveyou.

Your poem is beautiful and sad. I loved it.