Love does not hurt
Love does not hurt so a friend once told me
So why then am I filled with so much agony?
Why can I not just move on and be strong
Perhaps I assumed with us nothing would go wrong
If this pain is a sign of what is to come
Lord, please take my heart so I can feel numb
And I’ll fight the urge to replace love for hate
No matter what, you don’t deserve such a cruel fate
My pillow is wet, my eyes are red
It’s the worst time I feel when I go to bed
And I pray to God that you hear my chant
Comeback sweetie is the wish I want him to grant
(c) 2007 by Gerard C. Johnson
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in time
In time, in time...destiny will divulge "always blessings, never losses"- A
there are some reasons you
there are some reasons you should try free verse for.
1) Your rhyme is forced and it is quite perceptable.
2) maybe it could help you get rid of clichee
3) yes. You have a bit of a great trouble with metrics.
It doesn't matter how slow you go, as long as you don't stop
Thanks
Thanks for the feedback Nitta. I have tried my hand at some as free verse too. I've just recently started and my technicals are off.
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If you love me so much, why do you hate me so much?