this is my re-write.

Relaxing on my back
my chest blown open
everything I thaught was fixed
is shown to me as broken.

In a dark corner
a reunion Im hoping
trying to shut the very doors
I'd only just opened

betraying myself to no one
as I swear that Im fine
whilst a mental civil war rages
all throughout my mind

It seems that in this new world order
I don't seem to have a place
relationship looser
with a grin on my face.

:)

A strong piece...the third stanza stayed with me most...well done...

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