When You Were Touching Me

.
examining precious crystal
with gentle and respectful admiration
amazement evident in your
graceful patient movements
as if it's so delicate it might shatter

you hold it high against the light
and flick your fingers against the rim
tilting your head to hear its melodic ring
you move your hands and roll it against your palms
enjoying its cool smooth symmetry

you place it precisely on the shelf
and gaze at it intently before
picking up the next piece and
devoting the same candid idolatry
to its multifaceted surface

that's how it felt when
you were touching me

Loved it !

Loved it, loved it, loved it! Boy oh boy can you write! The whole idea the of inspection and applicating it to the way lover can touch, I liked lots. Esp. these two lines

devoting the same candid idolatry
to its multifaceted surface

Then bang that last stanza knocks you out! I love your work so much. Thank you.

WOW, thank you!

WOW, thank you!

so soft

And such a delicate piece of writing. Great feeling in it.

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