Beauty
Beauty
Beauty in the beholders eyes,
undefined, different for every mind.
Some are striking, spent all their time,
dressing the outside, neglected mind.
Some ugly by societys paradign
beauty inside, that makes them shine.
Their smile, eyes, touch, radiate love,
inornately packaged, angels from above.
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A Nice Start
Deb,
I do believe that you have a very nice start with this piece but I also feel that there could be a little tightening up done to make it even better. If you decide to reread it perhaps you will see what I mean. I'm always will to offer helpful suggestions if asked, I will not force them on anyone.
Still reading,
Pete
Thanks Again
What you think about, you bring about.
Dear Pete,
Tweeked and polished it abit, what are your thoughts now? Thanks for the input.
Sincerely,
Debborah
I liked it. Short but to the
I liked it. Short but to the point. "some that are striking, spent all their time, worrying about the outside, neglected the mind". And how can there be beauty without the mind?! Good job.
Michelle
Thank You
What you think about, you bring about.
Michelle,
Thanks I'm glad you liked it. There are plenty of so called beauties that are quite how does one put it "dumb". I watch Beauty and the Geek. LOL