Getting to Know You

Poetry pretty much mirrors
Different stages and places
In one’s life

It’s given away… in what you say
In your sense
of peace or strife

Your words describe you…
They strip from your soul
The shrouds and lay bare…

Your true thoughts, your ambitions
Your insights, your inhibitions
You perhaps unknowingly share

It’s a venting perhaps…
A release from the restraints…
Of cold hard reality

In some it’s of hope
In others of complaints
And in others still…of finality

In other’s it’s a cry for validation
A way of saying “I’m me…
I’m still here!”

In others It’s a cry of repudiation
Saying “listen to me now,
But don’t come near!”

When I read a poem
I see the person
Behind the prose

And that I see…
this person properly
Is something I can only suppose

You’re not only writing a poem or a rhyme
You’re openly inviting me into your mind
And just why?…only God knows

One develops opinions about you
And biases, both good and bad
Based on what you’ve unknowingly said

In your writings, choice of subject
Turn of phrase, become suspect
And lets one get into your head

Perhaps I should not…perhaps it’s not right
But I know you a bit better
each poem that you write

Surprising what we all reveal about ourselves

We develop a style with words we like to use.
Even when some change personas they can't
hide completely. I've been on this site a long
time now and have seen it go through different
manifestations. I think when I first realized
how much I was revealing, I was uncomfortable.
I'm more comfortable now but I don't leave
my stuff up here forever. I see it more as
entertainment. Interesting poem, David,
got me thinking. Kind of a cat and mouse
game. Makes me laugh to think of it that way.
raskin

I think I know you Raz...

David o Whalen First, thanks for your time and cogent comment! Now I'm going to do a thumb-nail sketch of Raskin the writer based on my observations from your writing. Physically: Your poems tell me that you're not a raving beauty (few of us are) but that you are above average in the looks dept'. You're at least middle aged, but don't show it in your appearance or your daily demeanor. You're a physically active person. you wear your hair mid-length, have brown eyes and brown (wanting to go grey)hair. You're overweight, but only a little, and that little bit bothers you a bit. You have at least a high school education (possibly a bit more). You're a mother and a housewife. Your ears are pierced, but you rarely wear earrings. You truly love your husband, and he truly loves you. You're middle income, white, 5 foot three +/- an inch. have a special affinity for Nature and the ocean. You're sensitive and your feelings can be easily hurt. You write mostly for yourself and take compliments with a grain of salt. Writing is therapy for you. You don't mind solitude and often prefer alone time (especially with Nature). You're generous and forgiving (sometimes to a fault). You have a good sense of humor and good insight to feelings of others. You like to write of feelings, emotions and moods. You're a good cook. You like to read more than the average person. You prefer to be outside whenever you can. You take interest in other people and are careful to never offend.
You're a good driver, but prefer not to drive at night and prefer your husband drive whenever possible. You're a writer who has no agenda (a good thing), no prejudices in your writing, only a desire to feel good with your writing and who enjoys the compliments that seem sincere. Please take no offense in my portrayal of you as it's just my personal mental picture and could be (probably is) wildly incorrect. If you choose to reply, and let me know how I did, please don't use your judgment alone. Include your husband's opinion since he probably knows you better than you do! Don't give me particulars if you reply, just let me know on a scale of one to ten (with ten being the most accurate). This might be interesting to most on this site. At least it will validate my poem or put it to lie! Thanks again Raz both for the comment and for bearing with an ol' fool. I wouldn't dare take the chance of doing this with the other popular poets on this site.

Imagination a six, not bad

Some is right some not. My eyes change from blue to green depending on how I feel. I have my Mothers eyes, looking in the mirror
at times I see her. Posting poems is interesting, reading how others read a poem. I will write a poem and love the process, revisions
etc. Once I post it, it becomes more about the reader. I think, for me that is the biggest transformation I've made.

I like reading old poetry, what's interesting is the best poetry takes ordinary and twists it into brilliance. It is able to stand over time
on it's own and is less about the poet. One thing I've noticed, is that most readers may not read all the words together. The interpretation
can be wildly inaccurate. I used to try to correct people to what I intended when I wrote it. Now I let the reader bring their own
experiences etc to the poem.

I get a lot of pleasure out of seeing my kids or husband read something and really enjoy it. They say it is like going
on a meander with me. They are walking with me on a little journey. It's a winding path through my brain, but usually, in the
end there is a point.
raskin

Thanks for replying Raz,

David o Whalen A six puts me only slightly above a random guess, so if I'm a typical reader, then we writers are not nearly as unconsciously expository as I had presumed, which pretty much shoots down the theme of my poem. I may have to revise my impression of some of the other writers on this site. Now I wonder if the writings of many don't instead reflect not what and who and how they are, but what and how they'd like themselves and things to be. (or appear to be). Maybe there's a poem in the misconceptions we (at least I ) draw from what other writers write.
Anyway, it was an interesting experiment in attributing perceptions from a person's conceptions. Perhaps poetry is more about deception than exposition. Ya think?

snapshots

I think a poem may be an emotional snapshot of a moment in time.
The time may be now or it may be in the distant past. I have written
that I tend to cherry pick from my memory when I write. Generally,
I have a word or phrase I want to use and build the poem around that.
For some writing is cathartic and current. I think there is much that goes
into it. I don't approach my writing with deceiving anyone, it isn't my style.
Some may write thinking they are revealing a "truth" my cynical side says
it has all been written many times over in different languages. You've had some
hits and interest on this poem but you may have an offshoot to explore. I think
that poetry is more of an exploration. It is the wonder of inspiration I love.
Thanks David for given me a chance to express this.
raskin

Makes you think.

Why do I feel compelled to post stuff? I write it for me. I love the therapy of finding words that fit with a base thought or feeleing, or where I am or what I am going through. What I really love is when you start something and intend it to be a certain way, and the pen just takes over and it ends up somewhere totally unexpected. Those are the ones I usually end up taking the time to edit and post. Thanks for making me think!
John

John, do you also...

David o Whalen like me, develop mental images of the people and their personalities based on their writings, or am I alone in this curious habit? Thanks for making me think that I made you think! Appreciate ya! (and you're still puttin' your picture and (unconscious) profile on the jailhouse window for all to see)

Truth

I know that what a man thinks in his heart so is he, but i did not realize that i am not not just showing the picture of reality based on my point of view, but that it does tell more about me too and you told me that as i was reading your poem and i totally agree.
there are those things that we see everyday and that are obvious but not all of us can see the simplicity in front of us until someone sees it for us in the right way. It is a great poem and i like being honest so i can actually look at my poems and see something about me that i do not see which might be obvious.

It is a wonderful thing that we learn a lot from each other.

George I appreciate...

David o Whalen your giving of me your time and thoughts. I haven't had the chance to read you yet, but I soon will. If your poetry is as coherent and as well expressed as your comment I'm sure you will be a welcome addition to the site. Thanks George, and welcome to the site. Enjoy, enjoy! Don't feel too bad about being unemployed, you've got a lot of company, even here in the states.

Dave,

how insightful ...i wonder myself...i have a solution , hit me up on facebook Ronnie Horner N.C.
you may be suprised to find that i'm actually a 9 year old boy.......trapped in the body of a 34 year old waste of space ! but i try...on everything but grammar and shift keys at least . I have actually looked for you before ...no luck..hope you are well and to Raskin my eyes turn from blue to green as well...but only when im really angry . hope you guys are well.

email at least.....xpertroof@gmail.com

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