Writes and Wrongs
Writes....
Chosen words,
Assembled,
Arranged and re-arranged.
Pondered on,
Poked and prodded,
Moulded into a style,
A format?
Maybe.
A Haiku?
....Picking words with care
....Adjusting them carefully,
....To fit the format.
Maybe.
A Tanka?
....Words that fit the slot,
....Counting all the syllables
....And then re-counting,
....As you attempt to create
....A literary jigsaw.
Maybe.
Sonnet?
Diminished hexiverse?
Maybe,
Maybe.
Freeverse?
Where YOU can let YOUR mind and pen run free, where YOU can be as random as YOU like. YOUR write can marry leprechauns and lanterns, red stilettos with a snow capped peak. YOU can bring together whatever YOU like, it can't be wrong, it's YOUR idea, YOUR imagination, YOUR chosen words, YOUR chosen subject, YOUR piece, YOUR write.
Maybe.
Wait now.
Wait.
For a comment,
Or two.....
Maybe.
A comment,
A comment on YOUR write,
On the choice of words,
The words YOU joined together,
The lines YOU crafted,
The write YOU quietly presented,
To this new world.
This poetry world.
A comment comes!!
The comment is harsh,
Too harsh.
There is a difference between
Constructive and
Destructive.
Minimalist?
Unlikely!
The comment from a self professed top banana is totally uncalled for. The self, self, self approach from a self centred, self indulgent, self promoting, attention seeking knob, who has obviously read the book on "How To Be Stupid", inwardly digested it and now lives his life to every word printed in it, has written a totally destructive comment, that in no way, shape or form, can do anything but harm. Well done "Mr I'm Ever-So-Important-To-Myself", I can quite honestly say I don't know what you thought you might achieve by your comment, I've no idea at all. The only thing I can get from it is that I had you more wrong than I thought in the first place. You're a much bigger fucking idiot than I ever gave you credit for!
Freeverse....
hmmm, maybe,
The write is right,
The comment can be wrong.
Yes,
Freeverse I think.
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This Is Good, Very good
Love the style and the arrangement and the whole creation of the piece Dave.
I agree with U, we so dont need comments from Mr 'up his own backside' with the destructive criticisms it entails. I am at a total loss to see how this can benefit anybody on sites and although your words dont have to be sugar coated, the opposite extreme is far more damaging. The worst ones of all, are those who think it necessary to slam people down in their actual writes, when it is directly aimed at injuring them repeatedly. What poor use of creative ability! and Is there any creative ability in that..?
Write on!
D
Thanks Debs
You get my point exactly, there is simply no need for blatently rude and destructive comments, especially if a writer/poet is new to this or any other site. It's almost a kind of bully boy tactic.
Anyway, thanks for commenting on the style and arrangement of this piece, I thought I would try something a little different!
Thanks as always for reading and commenting,
Dave
Well Put David
I totally agree with all you have written ,nobody should try to change anyones poems as you say it is there unique words their feelings, nobody`s but there own write, and if they dont like it they can move on to the next victim,who do they think they are.someone who gets out of it by saying they were only trying to help, doesn`t wear .it doesn`t heal the hurt.
If folk ask for Critique then that is different.I thank you for seeing it the same way David ,well written hugs from Willow
Many Thanks Willow
There is a big difference between a constructive critique and a destructive comment. I think most writers are more than willing to listen to a constructive comment, and maybe even make changes on the advice offered, I know I've done it in the past. A rude and destructive comment serves no purpose at all, except to leave the writer feeling hurt as you say.
Thanks for reading and commenting, always appreciated,
Dave
I just know whenever I read
I just know whenever I read something from you it will be interesting and different and make me think :o)
Cleverly constructed and thought provoking subject and I loved it :o)
-xXx-
Thank You
For such a charming comment, very much appreciated,
Dave
Mr Gibbs
I thouht this was a load of rubbish, badly put together, and as for the grammer well what can I say only very dissapointing, the punctuation. is all but, non "existent, and have you not heard of spel chekers. The theme of the poem although quite good to start with is at the end quite disturbing.
Yours in good faith
A pompus arse
Lol!!............Dear Pompus Arse,
Many thanks for such a constructive comment, the depth of your advice speaks volumes of your understanding of this write. I am truly grateful that you would spend such a small amount of your prescious time imparting some of your skill and knowledge of writing, on such a humble piece as this. I am forever endebted that you would grace my work with your glorious wisdom. I feel that at this point, I should like to say, and I think I speak for the whole site here, that we are all so very fortunate to have a true master in our midst, many thanks again for your wonderful words, which I shall print off and hang in the lavvy so that every time I take a dump, I shall think of you my friend.
Your humble apprentice,
Dave
On Second Thoughts...
'Mr Pompous Arse' does have some incredibly good points to make Mr Gibbs....in fact i think he may have swayed my opnion on the whole matter.... Im pretty fickle like that and i think it sucks now! :.0
A. Twat
Miss Twat
I am very pleased you have seen the errer of your'e ways and have seen this piece of work for what it trully is. I have now become bored with Mr Gibbs work and am now off to abuse more less fortunate literate souls than myself.I do hope you will keep up the good work in the future.
Kind regards
A pompous arse
Dear Miss Twat and Mr Arse
After carefully considering your comments on this piece, I find myself in total agreement with you both. Whatever possessed me to write such trivia is possibly something that none of us will ever know. I can only apologise, bucket loads, for my abuse and mis-use of the Queens english. I now whole heartedly support you in rubbishing this sorry piece, that I once so proudly put my name too. An unfortunate mistake on my part, I suspect due to lack of proper training in the arts, questionable mental health and alcohol. My sincere apologies to you both, your most humblist humble servant,
Dave