SNAKES
Our days are nolonger grey
The sun is warming up the days
So the snakes come out to play
To warm up through the day
WOW!! their are lots of snakes today
I almost step on the snake in my way
He is mad now & wants me to pay
So he strikes at me while im in his way
He strikes me with all his might
Strikes me really tight
His head pinned to my thigh
So i grab his throat really tight
I pull with all my might
To remove him from my thigh
So i throw him far into the sky
Back into the bush where he will survive
So snakes don't strike me today
Because this red head dosen't want to play
Colin Bradley
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Snakes
A good poem, but the extended rhymes are sometimes a bit strained ( might, thigh ?) (nolonger a typo).
Try couplets.
SNAKES
Thankyou Leslie for your comment I understand your comment about the repeat of thigh & tight although on the day I wrote this poem I seen 8 snakes on my property in one day all deadly one of those snakes striked at my thigh so I wrote the poem straight away I think I was still full of adrelenin from the incident,for excample have you ever heard a person just after fight or accident tell you their story they usaully repeat things.most importantly im not good at grammar or writeing so will see alot of errors in my poetry I like them to be raw & real for my entertainment also I love to share my experience.