Carnival

We were a carnival of sadness and madness
Soaring through the lonely desert’s roads

I was the saddest of all
I felt trapped behind those aluminum doors

The heat was unbearable
My emotions growing larger behind my eyes
Collecting my tears
That flowed down my cheeks
Turning into dust, into air
Into vapor, into none

I was the most complex show of all
The silent attraction that only hoped to leave home

I still don’t know what to do, where to go
I only stand here in the middle
And people think I’m a riddle
And they go on pretending to know who I am

Angelica..

Angelica- this is a very well written piece. I like how you have created the stanza's here, and the third stanza really stands out. I especially like the opening lines of this verse, it is very catchy and draws the reader in- 'Sadness and Madness'
I hope these words are helpful to you, and when I have more time will read and comment more.

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